~ The Shallow Men ~ (A Tribute to T.S. Eliot)

(( I really like T.S. Eliot’s poem, “The Hollow Men”. It was a piece that stuck with me long after I had read and re-read it many times. In an effort to create something worthy of his ilk, I fashioned my own poem, styling it in the same style and manner as “The Hollow Men”. The subject matter is something of a twist, but I was very pleased with how it turned out.))

 

I

 

We are the shallow men

We are the plastic men

Lying together

Headpiece filled with fantasy. Alas!

Our fickle voices, when

We deceive together

Are convincing but meaningless

As dot matrixes and words

Or paint pixels airbrushed over real bodies

In our secret cellar of the soul

 

Shape with form, color without substance,

Self-made force, motion without emotion;

 

Those who have witnessed

With direct minds, to pleasure’s other Kingdom

Remember us — if you do — not as real

Caring souls, but only

As the shallow men

The plastic men.

 

II

 

Women I dare not meet in life

In pleasure’s dream kingdom

These do appear:

There, the women are

Clad in sheer nothingness

There, is a webcam showing

And bodies are

In the mind’s knowing

More distant and unreal caress

Than a faking porn star.

 

Let me be no closer

In pleasure’s dream kingdom

Let me also don

Such intentional masks

Dog’s slobber, Snakeskin, swollen staff

In a darkened room

Behaving on Lust’s behalf

No closer —

 

Not that casual meeting

In the fantasy kingdom.

 

III

 

This is the fake land

This is the practice land

Here the camera’s images

Are shown, here they receive

The stroking of a lusty man’s hand

Under the faint light of a computer screen.

 

It is like this

In pleasure’s other kingdom

Being alone

At the hour when we are

Craving the fantasy

Lips that would kiss

Form exhalations of broken grunts.

 

IV

 

The women are here

There are women everywhere, here

In this 2-D world of shooting stars

In this shallow valley

This broken heart of our forsaken kingdoms

 

In this fakest of meeting places

We fondle together

And avoid intimacy

Gathered on this information super-highway

 

Emotionless, unless

The soul reappears

As the real life woman

Many-hued, faceted being

of life’s true kingdom

The only hope

of shallow men.

 

V

 

Here we go round the prickly truth

Prickly truth prickly truth

Here we go round the prickly truth

At three o’clock in the morning.

 

Between the concept

And the doing

Between no emotion

And the action

Falls the Deception

 

For Mine is the Kingdom

 

Between the energy

And the climax

Between the disrespect

And the using

Falls the Deception

 

Orgasm is not very long

 

Between the lust

And the release

Between the potential

And the reality

Between the legs

And the sheets

Falls the Deception

For Mine is the Kingdom

 

For Mine is

Pleasure is

For Mine is the

 

This is the way the real love ends

This is the way the real love ends

This is the way the real love ends

Not with a voice but a keystroke.

~ C.L.R. ~ © 2009



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About dragonkatet

Regarding the blog name, Dragon’s Dreams ~ The name comes from my love-affairs with both Dragons and Dreams (capital Ds). It’s another extension of who I am, a facet for expression; a place and way to reach other like-minded, creative individuals. I post poetry and images that fascinate or move me, because that’s my favorite way to view the world. I post about things important to me and the world in which we live, try to champion extra important political, societal and environmental issues, etc. Sometimes I wax philosophical, because it’s also a place where I always seem to learn about myself, too, by interacting with some of the brightest minds, souls and hearts out there. It’s all about ‘connection(s)’ and I don’t mean “net-working” with people for personal gain, but rather, the expansion of the 4 L’s: Light, Love, Laughter, Learning.
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23 Responses to ~ The Shallow Men ~ (A Tribute to T.S. Eliot)

  1. This is excellent…thank you for sharing.

  2. trisha says:

    fantastic collection, very realistic and well written.

    trisha
    http://mydomainpvt.wordpress.com/2011/02/14/free-soul-14th-feb-2011/

  3. I think you worked very hard on this. It is clever and pointed at problems that are rife in our culture at this time … Well done. Very well done. You are rightfully proud.

    Happy Valentine’s Day and Happy Potluck! Thanks for your wonderful comment on my site.

    Peace –

    • dragonkatet says:

      Thanks so much, Jamie. It did take awhile, and I wanted something that had an edge to it. Happy ❤ Day and Happy Potluck to you, too! 🙂 I wish I had more time to visit your site more often. You have such good stuff there!

  4. ogungbesan20 says:

    GREAT TRIBUTE! THANKS FOR SHARING

  5. bendedspoon says:

    You’re deep to write the ugly truth wonderfully 🙂

    • dragonkatet says:

      Aw, thanks for the kind words, spoon! It is an ugly truth, and something of a ‘button’ for me…writing is cathartic in the sense that I can wage war against it with my words, if nothing else. 🙂 Happy ❤ Day and Potluck!

  6. Jingle says:

    well expressed sentiments.

    A++
    Happy V Day.

  7. bward42 says:

    That was so powerful! I’m in awe of the energy and rawness you’ve captured in your words. I fitting tribute to such a great poet!

  8. Scent of my heart says:

    That was brilliant! It sure took a time to form it so nice and find the words to mix well, so long and yet I didn’t loose my interest! I like!

  9. fiveloaf says:

    wow! alot of effort that brings great results.. thanks for coming by dragon..

  10. Angela Cohan says:

    Very well-written. T.S. Elliot would have been proud.

  11. eebrinker says:

    you worked in a strength that had ME almost cringing, and i don’t do porn! lol … plus being female kinda leaves out the “staff” part. *smiles*

    what’s interesting, is i was in a different mood yesterday — more energy. and this had sort of a rolling depth that i can’t see today. so that’s pretty cool … that the target audience is one working on a sharper level.

    the working in of the nursery rhyme is pretty creepy …. as in, well done eerie effect. like you could hear a doll in the “webcam” room whispering it over and over ….

    • dragonkatet says:

      Thanks, E. 🙂 As is probably obvious from this, I very much don’t do it, either, and find most of it quite degrading and distasteful. Thanks for the compliment re: the target audience, and the nursery rhyme thing is actually sort of in the original, too, although in different words, so I can’t claim credit for the idea.

  12. how are you?

    love your blog, your poetry is impressive!
    Make a contribution to us today, the collection is to be closed within 24 hours.
    Thanks, we value your support. xxx

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