This morning dawned with a damp, grey rain.
It drew the energy from me and I
wanted to crawl,
back behind my eyelids.
My heavy head sank, a slow-motion slip to the pillow,
as the rain’s rhythm tapped the glass and sang
me back to sleep.
I’m ripped from dreams by the clock.
The blaring alarm sends sharp nails
through my mind. Slit eyes study red bars
that blink and shift into strict, numbered sense.
Bleary, weary, I know…
I must get up.
A soft paw on my chin – the cat’s awake.
His heat and rumbling purr motivate.
My thoughts turn to coffee, a cigarette, a hot shower.
I take my comfort where I can.
Sweet, hot java mixes with smooth smoke.
I sit and watch the drops drip down outside,
as the cat slinks like oil into my lap.
Later, I stand naked, under jets
and emerge, dripping, like this morning’s sky.
~ C.L.R. ~ © 2007
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excellent descriptive
can sympathize w/the jarring alarm — why i gave them up. sometimes i think we call things “bad” so that we can enjoy them more (re coffee and smokes). mostly even if my body “wakes” up — the ‘mind’ doesn’t arrive until sometime afternoon 🙂 i admire those who take the day by the horns, even if it’s a rainy one.
Hey, thanks E! Lol…you may be right about the coffee and smokes…breakfast of champions haha. As a night-owl, my ‘mornings’ these days are after noon, but I think there is beauty even in the grey days – they’re under appreciated.
lovely coffee break haha! here’s my week 38 potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/09/30/i-cant-hold-it/
Thanks, fiveloaf. 🙂
I enjoyed this! A beautiful, calming poem to wake up to… This SO describes my morning routine! (except the cigarette part :P)
Thanks for sharing.
Ohhh thanks so much for the kind words. Glad you could relate. 🙂
this poem is so true, I love it!
can’t wait to read more 🙂
Ah, thanks! 🙂 Love your blog name, btw.
Don’t you just hate morning people?
Nice depiction of the daily grind.
Lol…people that are *happy* (bright-eyed and bushy-tailed, so to speak) in the morning make me rather nauseous. Thanks for stopping by! 🙂
Very nice. I like the description you use for the events
Thanks! 🙂
as the rain’s rhythm tapped the glass and sang
me back to sleep…
love every word. superb writing…
Happy Rally.
🙂
🙂 Thanks, Jingle. Happy Rally!
You have reminded me of the worst part of all those working years. I’m retired now. That’s the only advantage in growing old: no alarm, coffee is on a timer, a doggy door lets the critters in and out. Life is good.
Lol…I can’t wait until I’m retired! (Still a long way away). That can’t be the only advantage though…I mean, look at how much wisdom you have now and how much you’ve learned! Life is good, indeed – sometimes it takes appreciating the ordinary moments to become aware of that. 🙂 Thanks so much for dropping by.
Well done. Totally related.
Thank you, Jamie. 🙂 Glad you could relate.
Wonderful words woven together.. 🙂
May I please invite you to join us for Thursday Poets Rally week 38, where all of your entries are to be fully represented after the collection is over. Link one of your poems via the link below and enjoy encouragements from fellow poets.
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.blogspot.com/
Sending you loads of wishes-
from officials at Thursday Poets Rally community
xoxox
Thanks, Olivia. 🙂 Already linked, but ty for the reminder! Happy Rally!
Such vivid descriptions…a very engaging write. Well done.
😀 Thank you very much, David!
I soooooooooooo can relate. Very well done…Great visuals created by your words.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/02/17/truth-be-known/
🙂 Thanks so much for coming by. Glad you can relate.
yeah, I face the same problem every morning -it’s so hard to get up… nicely expressed in your poem 🙂
Hehe…thanks, and I’m glad you could relate. 🙂
You grabbed me with the first line and simply did not let go. Your talent to create a visual medium in the mind is wonderful. You are a good story teller, keep up the good work.
🙂 wow, thank you so much for the kind words!
Awesome portrayal of the mundane morning habits!
🙂 Thanks!
Great poem
Thank you. 🙂
A cosy narrative of your morning, with a nice and smooth flow. I like this piece!
Thanks so much! 🙂
Not being a morning person, totally loved this one! Perfect Rally contribution. Also wanted to thank you for all your lovely comments on my blog … and sorry for the later return visit, busy, busy here! Best regards!
Thanks, Blaga! 🙂 No worries on return visits – I honestly don’t keep track of the ppl who ‘tit for tat’ – I just visit the blogs I like, and explore new ones and try to respond in a timely manner to any/all comments. In other words, don’t stress it. 😉 Thanks for coming by!
what a beautiful description of waking up…. 😉
🙂 Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed.
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Wonderful imagery of a morning day! Love the cat slinks like oil in my lap!
🙂 Thanks I’m glad you enjoyed! He *does* slink like oil – so sneaky that sometimes he will be there before I realize it! lol
fantastic poem. i dont like rainy morning, esp if i have to go out in it.
visiting you from Jingle’s blog,
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/
Happy Rally!
trisha
Thanks, Trisha. 🙂 I think there can be beauty, even in the grey and rainy days, too (but then…I was born in Seattle, so…lol). Happy Rally!
Some really beautiful imagery in this piece. Thanks for sharing. Here’s my week 38 entry: http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2010/10/02/a-message-to-the-young-lady/
Thanks so much! 🙂 On my way to check yours out now.
the imagery used here totally made me want to crawl back into bed and visit a while longer with my pillow and comforter! Thanks for sharing your coffee time with me this morning…I felt as if I were right there inhaling your 2nd hand smoke! Very nice job!
🙂 Oh, I hope I didn’t offend with the secondhand smoke! Glad you could relate and thanks for the lovely comment.
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I can indeed relate to slices of this ordinary morning, but your words make it evocative and extraordinary. Thank you.
Aw, what a nice thing to say! 🙂 Thank YOU.
Greetings:
Hope all is well.
Noting that you have been part of poets rally in the year of 2011,
what an achievement, thanks for your outstanding contribution to us
along the way, keep up the excellence. Best!
Come join our poetry rally today if you wish to mingle and get inspired!
A poem of your choice or a free verse is accepted.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Looking forward to seeing you share.
Respect and hugs.
xoxox
This is awesome I loved it!
🙂 Thanks!
You’re welcome. Hope you also check my poetry some other time.
All the sense used in describing your morning. A good choice to link to Victoria’s prompt and it flows with the sense of a story. Nicely done. Enjoyed much.
Thanks for coming out to play tonight, Corina. 🙂
Thanks, Jamie. 🙂 It’s an older piece, but I still thought it fit the prompt.
Corina, this reminds me of how effective writing (prose or poetry) can become when you use crisp sensory description AND verbs to describe them so you have that “show don;t tell” thing going on. Exceptionally graphic. And I want to go back to bed, now!
So enjoyed this. I am not a morning person and detest that alarm going off to wake me up…so could relate to this. Probably more helpful is that sweet kitty paw urging you to start the day. Great description and imagery in this, Corina…especially those eyes that just don’t want to open…and that “oily” kitty in your lap.